2026-09-15 · check · 1 paper · 21/40 · 53% · not grade-converted
0 left blank · AO5 13/24 (L3 lower, bottom) + AO6 8/16 (L2 top) = 21/40. Same total as the 8 Sep check (attempt 5) but composed differently: comma splices gone, paragraphing at every shift, planned cyclical ending; loss moved to spelling of everyday words and thin, borrowed setting/character.
| Q | Topic | Marks | Question | Answer given | Note |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| 5 AO5 | W2 | 13/24 | Story opening: being somewhere you shouldn't be (2026 format) | Second-person present. Through a trapdoor into an old bomb shelter; laughter from deep inside; scent of dust and blood; creeps down a corridor; finds best friend Jason Todd (Red Hood) strapped to a chair with the Joker over him; photos of him everywhere; a chemical smell, whirring, everything fades; wakes to Nightwing asking what happened, 'I'm fine'; last line: all you can hear is the Joker's laugh. Eight paragraphs, each break on a shift of place/time/focus. | L3 lower 13/24: 'engaging, linked and relevant ideas; usually coherent paragraphs; usually effective structural features' met: 8 paragraphs breaking at shifts, laughter motif opening and closing (planned), a real temporal shift (drugged, fades, wakes). Bottom of L3 because setting and character are carried by borrowed DC names an examiner need not know, so description is thin (one sentence each on chair, photos). Lift: one paragraph that slows down and builds the room from chosen detail. |
| 5 AO6 | T5.2 | 8/16 | Technical accuracy of the same piece | 0 comma splices in ~200 words (she reported 0 from her own 5-min check; verified 0). Full stops and opening capitals secure. Brackets used correctly; speech marks attempted (one missing comma before the closing quote). Capital letter after a comma twice ('...along, You hear', '...end, You see'). One tense slip ('asked' in a present-tense piece). ~12 spelling errors on everyday words: friend, suddenly, happened, laughter x2, meanwhile, corridor, commonly, strapped, scent, whirring, sinister; 'Jokes' for Joker's; 'know' for known. | L2 top 8/16: demarcation now mostly secure and mostly accurate (beyond L2); 'some control of a range of punctuation' (brackets, speech); 'attempts a variety of sentence forms'. Ceiling is spelling: everyday words misspelt (~12), so L3 'generally accurate spelling incl. complex and irregular words' not met and Standard English is 'some' (tense slip). Lift to L3: a personal list of the everyday words she misses, retrieved in starters; no capital after a comma. |
Ordered by marks lost. These are the candidates for reteaching.