Ran the 11:00 set-text block 11:03-11:55 on the Ozymandias/London comparison paragraph; stopped at her "also times" with the exit ticket set but not attempted. Starter 3/3 unaided, no notes: "marks of weakness, marks of woe" (missed 17 Sep) exact; "I wander thro' each charter'd street" exact with Blake's spellings; inscription exact with colon and exclamation mark, one spelling slip 'Ozymandius'. Retype London / Palace / priests / charter'd done 4/4 (owed since 14 Sep). Both quotations written on their own lines exact. First draft: both quotations garbled inside the paragraph ('I am Ozymandias, King of kings, Look on my works. Ye mighty and despair.', 'through each chartered street') despite the pre-written lines - test #1 contradicted; no evaluative sentence; real angle reached unaided (Shelley control as irony, Blake 'more upfront'). One general steer -> draft 2: Ozymandias quotation exact inside the paragraph (first time), 'charter'd' spelled Blake's way twice, but London quotation dropped to the single word, 'they' for one poet x2, 'I looked / I saw', no reader effect for Blake. Four-item fault list -> draft 3 fixed 2 of 4 ('they' to names; king-owns-the-street sentence, reached after 'controlled and broken' was narrowed to 'who owns it'). Two-item 60-second fix -> 'I' sentences cut, London line still not inserted (asked three times). Spellings: becouse, controled, streat, Ozymandius; 0 of the four retyped words wrong. 10 items set, 10 attempted, 0 blank. Exit ticket (one both/A/B/so sentence from memory) and context-clause test #14 not run; no two-line close.
FIRST: the exit ticket cut short today - one both/A/B/so sentence from memory on control in Ozymandias and London, no notes - then the context clause on the comparison paragraph with no shape hint (test #14, wait a full attempt). Starter, no notes: "I wander thro' each charter'd street", "Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!" and the name Ozymandias spelled out; fewer than 2 of 3 -> re-copy before anything new. Then finish the comparison paragraph: Blake's full line inserted (not done after three asks), 'and while' -> 'while', spellings because/controlled/street corrected by her. Then the next K3.2 test: narrowed structural question first on a fresh feature of London, then the open form. Still blocked on Macbeth, ACC and AIC text work until the text-knowledge sessions start.
Exit ticket not attempted: one both/A/B/so sentence from memory on control in Ozymandias and London. Context clause (test #14) not run. Comparison paragraph stands as draft 4 with Blake's full quotation still not inserted. Her two-line close not written.
| Topic | Name | Change | Evidence recorded |
|---|---|---|---|
| K4.2 | Developing → Developing | Starter 3/3 unaided, no notes: 'marks of weakness, marks of woe' exact (missed 17 Sep, recalled today); London first line exact with thro'/charter'd; inscription exact with punctuation, 'Ozymandius' spelled wrong. Ozymandias third clean starter running; London now 2/2. Inside the paragraph draft 1 garbled both, draft 2 held the Ozymandias inscription exact for the first time. | |
| P1.02 | Gap → Gap | London used in a comparison paragraph, supported (shape given, one general steer, one fault list): charter'd read as the king owning the street, reached after one narrowing ('controlled and broken' -> 'owned by the king'). Full London quotation never made it into the paragraph over three asks. Level 3 evidence again ('explained comments, identification of writer's methods with some reference to purpose'). Exit ticket not run. | |
| K1 | Developing → Developing | First-draft comparison paragraph landed one angle unaided (Shelley control as irony, Blake 'more upfront') with no listing - the loose end held on the comparison. Draft still needed a general steer then a fault list: 2 of 4 listed faults fixed on draft 3. Level 3, not Level 4 unaided. | |
| K5 | Developing → Developing | No evaluative 'done a good job' sentence in any of four drafts after it was named as a countable fault before writing (0/4 drafts). New fault: 'they' for a single poet x2 and 'I looked / I saw' as subject in drafts 1-3; both cleared by draft 4 after being named. | |
| K6.1 | Gap → Gap | Retype of London / Palace / priests / charter'd done 4/4; 0 of those four misspelled in the drafts (test #27: vs 1 on 17 Sep). Other typed misspellings: 'becouse', 'controled', 'streat', 'Ozymandius' (4). Not corrected by her when named ('because', 'controlled' flagged before draft 3, still wrong in draft 3). | |
| P1.01 | Developing → Developing | Inscription exact with punctuation in the starter (third clean session) and exact inside draft 2 of the comparison paragraph. Irony angle stated in her own words ('the whole poem is about how his control crumpled'). No unaided Level 4 paragraph; comparison was supported. |